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05-05-2012, 04:03 PM
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This is a short I helped conceive with my younger sister for her college film class. The object was to shoot a sequence showing a character traveling from one point to another. The rest was a blank slate. She asked me if I had any ideas, we had a quick brainstorming session that included the actors (more siblings, I won't lie), then shot it the next day. I tried to add some non linear, symbolic ideas into the narrative. Again, with the previous short I posted here (http://www.collativelearning.com/mybb_14...?tid=968), the results are not wholly complete, but still came together in a satisfactory way. If we had more time to plan and rehearse, and perhaps an additional day of re-shoots, I feel it would have been much tighter.





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05-06-2012, 04:14 AM
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Not seeing the link here.
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05-06-2012, 06:35 AM
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Hmmmm. Well, I used the video link thingy, and I can see the youtube video in my post. Not sure what the problem is. Let me try again:





And here is the link all by itself:

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=6l0TV2HxIpk
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05-06-2012, 04:55 PM
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Hey, nice work. A couple of my thoughts:

- I really liked the second shot of the film with the barbed wire
- In your first film you had a great soundtrack choice and in my opinion you've followed it up with another great choice that suits this film
- The finger undoing the zip was nice idea too

I feel like the main character is haunted from the past. He didn't watch his baby sister carefully and she accidentally drowned.
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05-13-2012, 05:05 PM
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(05-06-2012 04:55 PM)thisisallyouneed Wrote:  Hey, nice work. A couple of my thoughts:

- I really liked the second shot of the film with the barbed wire
- In your first film you had a great soundtrack choice and in my opinion you've followed it up with another great choice that suits this film
- The finger undoing the zip was nice idea too

I feel like the main character is haunted from the past. He didn't watch his baby sister carefully and she accidentally drowned.

Thank you Smile The shot of the character walking under the barbed wire was something that came to me in the moment, and I liked the way it turned out. The general idea behind the intro to the story was to start from far away and work our way in closer. This would all lead up to the intimate, face to face encounter at the conclusion. I guess you could say I was influenced by the work of Sergio Leone in that way. He liked to shoot from far distances and juxtapose that with extreme close ups.

The music choice was taken from one of my film making idols, John Carpenter. It's one of his compositions from Christine, and my sister and I felt it supported the overall tone of the short. We were trying to show that the force who was after our main character was inevitable, unstoppable, and inescapable.

Your comments about the underlying meaning are not far off base Wink Glad to know that some of what we were trying to say came across in to a viewer. I admit, the imagery isn't the most sophisticated or complex, but there was some thought put into it, and we tried not to just spell things out onscreen.

When my sister first asked me if I had any ideas for this project, the first thing I did was cross reference a number of objects and locations I knew I already had at my disposal, and their possible meanings via dream interpretations. Picking among these, I tried to get a general feel for what the story could be. After that, I mapped out the action in my head, incorporating the dream symbolism throughout. As before, some of the ideas didn't come to full fruition, others were there but not exactly as I imagined them, and some just got lost in the shuffle. I suppose this is all part of the creative process, and shows why preparation is imperative to successful film making. No wonder Kubrick was such a stickler for detail. If every director put in the thought and attention to detail he did, maybe we would have more thought provoking, worthwhile films along his caliber.

Originally, I wanted his glasses broken much earlier in the action. I wanted to incorporate the barn into the narrative, as well as a few other symbolic images. There were also some quick shots we filmed that might have made the action smoother. My sister had to take the raw material back to school with her (to another state), and edit it without my input. I think some of it was excised due to the constraints of the assignment. I would like to have an opportunity to re-cut it without any outside influence and see if it comes out a little better. Some of the action was a little slipshod and I believe could benefit from this.

Thanks for watching/reading. Anymore comments are welcome.
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06-20-2012, 02:39 AM
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(05-13-2012 05:05 PM)Frameous Wrote:  
(05-06-2012 04:55 PM)thisisallyouneed Wrote:  Hey, nice work. A couple of my thoughts:

- I really liked the second shot of the film with the barbed wire
- In your first film you had a great soundtrack choice and in my opinion you've followed it up with another great choice that suits this film
- The finger undoing the zip was nice idea too

I feel like the main character is haunted from the past. He didn't watch his baby sister carefully and she accidentally drowned.

Thank you Smile The shot of the character walking under the barbed wire was something that came to me in the moment, and I liked the way it turned out. The general idea behind the intro to the story was to start from far away and work our way in closer. This would all lead up to the intimate, face to face encounter at the conclusion. I guess you could say I was influenced by the work of Sergio Leone in that way. He liked to shoot from far distances and juxtapose that with extreme close ups.

The music choice was taken from one of my film making idols, John Carpenter. It's one of his compositions from Christine, and my sister and I felt it supported the overall tone of the short. We were trying to show that the force who was after our main character was inevitable, unstoppable, and inescapable.

Your comments about the underlying meaning are not far off base Wink Glad to know that some of what we were trying to say came across in to a viewer. I admit, the imagery isn't the most sophisticated or complex, but there was some thought put into it, and we tried not to just spell things out onscreen.

When my sister first asked me if I had any ideas for this project, the first thing I did was cross reference a number of objects and locations I knew I already had at my disposal, and their possible meanings via dream interpretations. Picking among these, I tried to get a general feel for what the story could be. After that, I mapped out the action in my head, incorporating the dream symbolism throughout. As before, some of the ideas didn't come to full fruition, others were there but not exactly as I imagined them, and some just got lost in the shuffle. I suppose this is all part of the creative process, and shows why preparation is imperative to successful film making. No wonder Kubrick was such a stickler for detail. If every director put in the thought and attention to detail he did, maybe we would have more thought provoking, worthwhile films along his caliber.

Originally, I wanted his glasses broken much earlier in the action. I wanted to incorporate the barn into the narrative, as well as a few other symbolic images. There were also some quick shots we filmed that might have made the action smoother. My sister had to take the raw material back to school with her (to another state), and edit it without my input. I think some of it was excised due to the constraints of the assignment. I would like to have an opportunity to re-cut it without any outside influence and see if it comes out a little better. Some of the action was a little slipshod and I believe could benefit from this.

Thanks for watching/reading. Anymore comments are welcome.

I really like the cinematography as well as the synchronization of music. It has a very original premise and the aesthetics work with it. This reminded me of the short film I did for my film/video production class in the 9th grade, which I would upload if I was able to edit it how I wanted to (group projects are a pain).
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06-20-2012, 07:01 AM
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I like it!

When I first saw the poster frame I thought you had done a film about Bigfoot, or Mikey Tuetel from American Chopper. But as it turns out, I really like the mystery of his face being covered with hair all the time - effective, dreamlike and not cheesy. And doubly effective because of the close resemblance to the sister's hair. The boogy man is her transsexualized and made big and scary. At the end she walks back to the water, symbol of the subconscious.

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